According to my dictionary, "intense" is an adjective. I thought I asked for none of those. Also your story is too short, and not enough happens. I want more details. Put me into Mollie's life. I want to hear the wet slap of fish as Mollie plops it on her display counter. I want to feel the sparge of the fish's last exhalation, as its eyes go glassy. I want to smell--no, to taste!--the delicate parfum of sea salt and kelp gracing Mollie's sun roughened neck. But pretend I am a blind man; I don't want to see anything.
p.s. We correspond so frequently, perhaps you could address me more informally. (E.g., use a comma.)
p.p.s. We have received many short stories of late. (I also consider blank documents and research articles short stories.) Perhaps you would like to join our Editorial Board?
Friday, April 29, 2011
The Rejection Saga: Dr Emmons Offers Me Another Go And Something Else
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