According to my dictionary, "intense" is an adjective. I thought I asked for none of those. Also your story is too short, and not enough happens. I want more details. Put me into Mollie's life. I want to hear the wet slap of fish as Mollie plops it on her display counter. I want to feel the sparge of the fish's last exhalation, as its eyes go glassy. I want to smell--no, to taste!--the delicate parfum of sea salt and kelp gracing Mollie's sun roughened neck. But pretend I am a blind man; I don't want to see anything.
p.s. We correspond so frequently, perhaps you could address me more informally. (E.g., use a comma.)
p.p.s. We have received many short stories of late. (I also consider blank documents and research articles short stories.) Perhaps you would like to join our Editorial Board?